WHAT: We are writing about a character of our choice
SO WHAT:
Be kind: I really like the way you highlighted the words you weren't completely clear of nice using capital letters, full stops and exclamation marks .
Be specific: A way to find out the word "surprisingly" you could find a dictionary but there are others.
Be helpful: Try to add as much vocabulary as you can and add as much as you did in the first piece.
NOW WHAT: I need to work on putting more vocabulary in.